Question

前不久，你校舉行了一場(chǎng)以“My Dream”為主題的班會(huì)活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下所提供的信息寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文。
內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)：
1．簡(jiǎn)述兩位同學(xué)的夢(mèng)想及理由；
2．你的未來(lái)“夢(mèng)想”是什么；
3．談?wù)勀愕南敕ā?br />注意：
1．詞數(shù)120左右；
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使行文連貫；
3．開(kāi)頭部分已為你寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
My Dream
 As is shown in the table, my classmates’ dreams vary considerably.
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Answer 1

My dream
As is shown in the table, my classmate’s dream vary considerably. Li long, whose mother is a music teacher, has a gift for music and is fond of singing and dancing. As a devoted fan of Singer Song Zuying, she wants to be a singer when growing up. As for Wu Dong , he is not only strong but also good at sports. He likes playing basketball, running and so on. His dream is to become a national athlete.
Personally , I dream of becoming a doctor in the future. It’s a virtue to cure the wounded and rescue the dying. Doctors are always respected and admired by people. Furthermore, I’m good at biology , chemistry and so on ,which will lay a solid foundation for becoming a qualified doctor.
In my opinion, people may gain what they dream of after hard work.

試題分析：本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)中心話(huà)題是我的夢(mèng)想，此話(huà)題貼近生活，學(xué)生們有話(huà)可說(shuō)，但是在寫(xiě)作時(shí)一定要注意審題，不要跑題，要按要點(diǎn)提示去完成寫(xiě)作任務(wù)，在理解my dream這句話(huà)的基礎(chǔ)上，提出自己對(duì)夢(mèng)想的看法，以及如何去實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想。此外，在句型句式上要盡量有所變化，可以使用非謂語(yǔ)，倒裝句等，不要使句式過(guò)于單一。在語(yǔ)言表達(dá)上要適當(dāng)使用插入語(yǔ)，連接詞等以使上下文語(yǔ)義連貫流暢，同時(shí)也使文章有層次感，有條理性。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】范文中提到一些常見(jiàn)短語(yǔ)has a gift for有什么樣的天賦； is fond of 喜愛(ài)；As for 至于；It’s a virtue to do 做某事是一種美德； In my opinion在我看來(lái)。. Li long, whose mother is a music teacher, has a gift for music and is fond of singing and dancing.這個(gè)句子中whose引導(dǎo)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句。As for Wu Dong , he is not only strong but also good at sports這個(gè)句子中用到not only but also連接兩個(gè)并列表語(yǔ)。Furthermore, I’m good at biology , chemistry and so on ,which will lay a solid foundation for becoming a qualified doctor.這個(gè)句子中which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，代指這件事。