Question

到現(xiàn)在，你遇到過許多老師：每一位老師都是與眾不同的。在你心中：理想的老師是什么樣的？請以“My Ideal (理想的) Teacher”為題目談一談你的看法，考慮下列要求：
1. 教師的年齡和性格特征；
2. 課堂上（教學(xué)風(fēng)格）；
3. 學(xué)校外（和睦相處）；
4. 家庭作業(yè)（多與少）；
提示： 1. 字?jǐn)?shù)：100詞左右；文章開頭已經(jīng)給出，不計入總字?jǐn)?shù)；     
2. 可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使行文連貫；
3. 參考詞匯： 風(fēng)格style；   負(fù)擔(dān)burden
My Ideal (理想的) Teacher
I have met many teachers up to now, and every teacher is different. However, my ideal teacher should have the following characters:
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Answer 1

My Ideal (理想的) Teacher
I have met many teachers up to now, and every teacher is different. However, my ideal teacher should have the following characters:
Firstly, she/he maybe young or old, but the most important thing is she/he should be energetic and enjoy teaching. Then, she/he should be open-minded, easy-going, warm-hearted and self-confident(a sense of humor etc.). Next, in class he/she can make her/his class interesting and students understand his ideas deeply and easily. He is good at using teaching methods to challenge students or to encourage students to study further. After that, she/he can get on well with students and share the happiness and sorrow with students after class. At last, because the ideal teacher’s homework is not too much, students’ burden can be lessened completely, all the students are looking forward to attending to her/his class.(109 words)

試題分析：題目要是以“My Ideal (理想的) Teacher”為題，談?wù)勀銓�理想老師的看法。寫作要點(diǎn)已經(jīng)給出，可以從老師的年齡和性格特征、教學(xué)風(fēng)格、親和力、布置作業(yè)情況等方面著手進(jìn)行寫作。注意單詞拼寫和標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號的正確使用，盡可能多使用一些定語從句、倒裝、賓語從句等語法知識；使用第一人稱進(jìn)行寫作。
亮點(diǎn)說明：范文注意使用Firstly, Then, Next, After that, At last來表示列舉，使作文顯得條理清晰、層次分明；
范文使用了表語從句the most important thing is she/he should be energetic and enjoy teaching；make后跟賓補(bǔ)make her/his class interesting；
范文使用了較多的短語和固定搭配：is good at，encourage students to study further，get on well with，share the happiness and sorrow with students，looking forward to，attending to等，使作文內(nèi)容比較充實(shí)。