Question

請根據(jù)以下提示，并結(jié)合事例，用英語寫一篇短文。
You can never succeed if you don’t give it a try.
注意：
①無須寫標題，不得照抄英語提示語；
②除詩歌外，文體不限；
③文中不得透露個人姓名和學(xué)校名稱；
④詞數(shù)為120左右。

Answer 1

Everybody wants to be successful. But only a few people take action immediately when they want to do something.
Whenever I saw my friends swim, I would admire them. How I wished I could swim like them! But I couldn’t seem to learn how. It frightened me just to think of being alone in the water. My father encouraged me to learn from my friends. He said, “ How do you know you can’t if you never give it a try? Nobody is born knowing how to swim.” I realized I needed to do something, and began to practice swimming on weekends. My father taught me, and showed me there was nothing to be afraid of. Two months later, I could swim.
This experience has also taught me that as long as I never give up and keep trying, I can succeed.

試題分析：考查開放性作文寫作,開放性作文給出了一個話題，并有部分的文字提示。給考生自由發(fā)揮的余地較大。對于考生的綜合能力要求較高，要求考生有很強的謀篇布局的能力和組織要點的能力。在完成開放性作文時，首先要選擇自己熟悉的短語或者句型，在你的能力范圍之內(nèi)，選擇句式時要賦予變化，因為這樣你才可以更好的駕馭。同時也要選擇合適的連接詞，把各個要點組織成一個完整的整體，如besides, further, last but not least等。在發(fā)表個人觀點的時候，可以使用諺語來提升整個文章的檔次和文采，也能增加得高分的可能性。
【亮點說明】文章使用了很好的短語和句子：take action采取行動，encourage …to do… 鼓勵某人做什么How I wished I could swim like them! 這句話用了虛擬語氣， It frightened me just to think of being alone in the water. 這句話用了it做形式主語， Nobody is born knowing how to swim.” 這句話用了伴隨狀語， there was nothing to be afraid of. 這句話用了there be句型。This experience has also taught me that as long as I never give up and keep trying, I can succeed.這句話用了賓語從句和條件狀語從句。