Question

上周你班同學(xué)展開了一場討論。主題是Wealth and Health，請你根據(jù)以下提供的信息，介紹一下你們討論的情況。
一些同學(xué)認(rèn)為財(cái)富更重要，如：沒有錢萬萬不行；想辦法多賺錢等；
一些同學(xué)認(rèn)為健康更重要，如：健康是本錢；要愛惜身體；
個(gè)人看法：更看重健康，身體不好，錢再多也無濟(jì)于事。
注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右；
2. 可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
Last week, we had a discussion about “Wealth and Health”.                           
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Answer 1

Last week, we had a discussion about “Wealth and Health”. Different people have different opinions.
　　Some people prefer wealth, holding that money can not bring everything, but without it, one can do nothing. However, other people regard health as more important. Once health is lost, it is no use having a lot of money.
　　As far as I am concerned, I love wealth, but I value health more. Everybody wants to live a happy life. So we try our best to earn money which can ensure we lead a comfortable life, but if happiness and comfort are achieved at the cost of their health, how can we be happy? Without health money becomes meaningless. So just do our best to keep healthy.

試題分析：本文屬于陳述正反方觀點(diǎn)的議論文作文，主題是Wealth and Health，給出了大部分要點(diǎn)，就是對(duì)健康和財(cái)富的不同觀點(diǎn)，要考生給出自己的觀點(diǎn)。文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，先是一些同學(xué)認(rèn)為財(cái)富更重要的觀點(diǎn)，然后是認(rèn)為健康更重要的觀點(diǎn)，最后是自己的觀點(diǎn)，要求考生用地道的英語表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)，要求觀點(diǎn)明確，駕馭語言的能力強(qiáng)，選擇詞匯的時(shí)候要選擇相對(duì)高級(jí)的詞匯，也要運(yùn)用多種句型，讓文章更有變化。難度在于選擇合適的詞匯和句型表達(dá)文章需要的意思，可以變換使用一些容易駕馭的句子或者詞匯實(shí)現(xiàn)同樣的目的。在寫作的時(shí)候要運(yùn)用合適的連接詞把要點(diǎn)串聯(lián)起來，使文章成為一個(gè)整體。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：本文屬于正反方觀點(diǎn)作文，但是要點(diǎn)給出的不算多，需要考生自己添加部分。在分析部分已經(jīng)詳細(xì)說明了。在寫作的時(shí)候要適合合適的連接詞來連接各要點(diǎn)，使他們成為整體。要選擇高級(jí)的詞匯和句型，讓文章有變化，有層次。