Question

【題目】假定你是李華，你的加拿大籍筆友Rex最近因上課注意力不能集中而感到苦惱，來信向你求助。請你給他寫封回信，表示安慰，并給出建議。要點如下：

1.寫信目的；2.你的建議；3.表達祝愿。

注意:1.詞數(shù)100左右

2.可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫

3.開頭語和結束語已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù);

4.參考詞匯：distraction 注意力分散

Dear Rex,

I’m really sorry to hear about your present situation.

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Good luck to you!

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Rex,

I’m really sorry to hear about your present situation. But don’t be worried about it too much, for it may happen to us all at this time or another. You can depend on it that there are many ways to help you out.

First, you can turn to your teachers or experienced persons for advice on your problem. I believe they can help you keep focused in class. Besides, lots of distraction is closely linked to lack of good sleep, so you can rearrange your schedule, and make sure you sleep 7 to 8 hours a day, Moreover, try not to push yourself too hard, and spare mare time to relax with something like sports, music and so on.

Good luck to you!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】本文屬于提綱類作文，要求假定你是李華，你的加拿大籍筆友Rex最近因上課注意力不能集中而感到苦惱，來信向你求助。請你給他寫封回信，表示安慰，并給出建議。注意書信的格式和用語�？紤]用一般現(xiàn)在時來寫。要點：1.寫信目的；2.你的建議；3.表達祝愿。這篇文章對于考生的綜合能力要求較高，要求考生有很強的謀篇布局的能力和組織要點的能力。需要注意緊扣文章主題，給出的要點都需要包括，缺一不可。寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，一定要契合給出的開頭，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問題。盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次。

【亮點說明】本篇書面表達要點全面，結構緊湊，是一篇較好的范文。這篇短文使用了大量的短語，為文章增色不少，如: focus in專注于，closely linked to同……密切聯(lián)系。還使用了賓語從句I believe they can help you keep focused in class.等多種句式結構，增加了文章的可讀性。