Question

最近，你們班召開(kāi)了以“我的‘中國(guó)夢(mèng)’”為主題的班會(huì)活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)寫(xiě)一篇日記，記述班會(huì)情況及自己的感受。內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)如下：
1. 每位同學(xué)都暢談了自己對(duì)中國(guó)夢(mèng)的理解； 
2. 你談到了自己的夢(mèng)想；  
3. 如何實(shí)現(xiàn)自己的夢(mèng)想。
　注意：
1. 總詞數(shù)120左右；  
2. 不可逐條翻譯；  
3.開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
Recently we had a class meeting on the topic of My “China Dream”.                                    
                                                                                              
                                                                                              
                                                                                              
                                                                                               
                                                                                              

Answer 1

Recently we had a class meeting on the topic of My “China Dream”. Inspired by President Xi’s China Dream, everyone talked enthusiastically about his understanding of China Dream. We all believe that this dream will come true in the future.
I also talked about my own dream. I have always wanted to be a doctor. Not only can doctors save people’s lives but also they are doing a respectable job. Doctors can also help people to live a better life with their professional knowledge.
To realize my dream, I must try to work hard from now on. I must learn as much as I can so that I can get into a good medical college, where I can prepare myself adequately for the job of a doctor. Only in this way can I accomplish my goal.

解析試題分析：本文是提綱類作文，話題是大家熟悉的中國(guó)夢(mèng)，學(xué)生們有話可說(shuō)，而且文章的要點(diǎn)也基本上都給出來(lái)了，但只是一個(gè)提綱，考生還需要做適當(dāng)?shù)陌l(fā)揮。在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中，要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時(shí)在列舉措施的時(shí)候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來(lái)很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫(xiě)作時(shí)不要啰嗦，力求簡(jiǎn)潔的表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】所給范文語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)潔，不拖拉，使用短語(yǔ)：come true 成為現(xiàn)實(shí)，live a better life過(guò)著更好的生活，還有范文充分體現(xiàn)高中教材中的重點(diǎn)語(yǔ)法和句式：Inspired by President Xi’s China Dream, everyone talked enthusiastically about his understanding of China Dream.這句話用了過(guò)去分詞做狀語(yǔ)， Not only can doctors save people’s lives but also they are doing a respectable job.這句話用了倒裝句， To realize my dream, I must try to work hard from now on. 這句話用了不定式做目的狀語(yǔ)，I must learn as much as I can so that I can get into a good medical college, where I can prepare myself adequately for the job of a doctor. 這句話用了結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)從句和定語(yǔ)從句，Only in this way can I accomplish my goal.這句話也是倒裝句。
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