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3．去年暑假，我和父母坐飛機到廈門旅游．我們在那里玩了三天．
第一天，我們參觀了廈門大學和南普陀寺．廈門大學是中國最美麗和浪漫的校園之一；
第二天，我們參觀了集美景區(qū)，那里非常漂亮；
第三天，我們參觀了鼓浪嶼．島上景色宜人，但是，大量的游客使得小島很擁擠．
注意：詞數100左右，短文的開頭已經寫好，不計入總詞數，可適當增加細節(jié)．
參考詞匯：廈門大學Xiamen University  南普陀寺 Nanputuo Temple
集美景區(qū) Jimei District     鼓浪嶼Gulangyu
Last summer holiday，I visited Xiamen with my parents by plane．
My English teacher once told us that Xiamen is a beautiful city that is worth visiting．（高分句型一）We stayed there for three days and we lived in a small fishing village．On the first day，we visited Xiamen University and Nanputuo Temple．Xiamen Universityisconsidered as one of the most beautiful and romantic campuses in China．Indeed，it's fantastic and its buildings are distinctive．On the second day，we enjoyed the scenery of Jimei District，which is pleasant for the eyes．（高分句型二）On the third day，we visited Gulangyu．It's amazing and I like it very much．There are many small specific stores．However，so many tourists make the small island too crowded．
Anyway，it was a pleasant trip．．

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分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據提示信息去年暑假，我和父母坐飛機到廈門旅游．我們在那里玩了三天．第一天，我們參觀了廈門大學和南普陀寺．廈門大學是中國最美麗和浪漫的校園之一；第二天，我們參觀了集美景區(qū)，那里非常漂亮；第三天，我們參觀了鼓浪嶼．島上景色宜人，但是，大量的游客使得小島很擁擠，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照時間順序寫．3、根據要表達的內容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應該用一般過去時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：by plane乘坐飛機；be worth doing值得做；Indeed確實，的確；However然而；Anyway不管怎么說；
My English teacher once told us that Xiamen is a beautiful city that is worth visiting．（高分句型一）
On the second day，we enjoyed the scenery of Jimei District，which is pleasant for the eyes．（高分句型二

解答 Last summer holiday，I visited Xiamen with my parents by plane．
      My English teacher once told us that Xiamen is a beautiful city that is worth visiting．（高分句型一）We stayed there for three days and we lived in a small fishing village．On the first day，we visited Xiamen University and Nanputuo Temple．Xiamen University is considered as one of the most beautiful and romantic campuses in China．Indeed，it's fantastic and its buildings are distinctive．On the second day，we enjoyed the scenery of Jimei District，which is pleasant for the eyes．（高分句型二）On the third day，we visited Gulangyu．It's amazing and I like it very much．There are many small specific stores．However，so many tourists make the small island too crowded．
      Anyway，it was a pleasant trip．

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．