Question

13．前段時間，我校高一年段進行了職業(yè)生涯規(guī)劃（career planning）設(shè)計比賽．每個人對于自己未來的職業(yè)都滿懷憧憬．請你就你心目中的未來職業(yè)，以My job in the future為題寫一篇簡短的演講稿．
注意：
（1）詞數(shù)100左右； 演講稿開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
（2）內(nèi)容要點：
①你未來希望從事何種職業(yè)；
②你想從事這份工作的原因；
③你該如何實現(xiàn)從事這份工作的理想．
（3）可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
My job in the future
Good morning，everyone．
I often imagine what my job would be like after graduating from university．Unlike others，I prefer to be a farmer in the future．
It is well known that farming is the basic of a country，without which people would starve．（高分句型一）I hope the whole world would be rid of hunger．Besides，we can make use of what we have learned in school to improve our agriculture．（高分句型二）Thus our countryside will become more and more prosperous．
I will work hard to reach my future．I will exercise regularly to build up my body and work hard in my study to be well educated．Only with a strong body and rich knowledge can I become a good farmer．（高分句型三）

Thank you!

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息高一年段進行了職業(yè)生涯規(guī)劃（career planning）設(shè)計比賽．每個人對于自己未來的職業(yè)都滿懷憧憬．請你就你心目中的未來職業(yè)，以My job in the future為題寫一篇簡短的演講稿，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：①你未來希望從事何種職業(yè)；②你想從事這份工作的原因；③你該如何實現(xiàn)從事這份工作的理想．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：prefer to更喜歡做；It is well known that …眾所周知；be rid of 祛除，擺脫；Besides另外；Thus因此；build up my body強身健體；more and more prosperous越來越繁榮
It is well known that farming is the basic of a country，without which people would starve．（高分句型一）
Besides，we can make use of what we have learned in school to improve our agriculture．（高分句型二）
Only with a strong body and rich knowledge can I become a good farmer．（高分句型三）

解答 Good morning，everyone!
       I often imagine what my job will be like after graduating from university．Unlike others，I prefer to be a farmer in the future．
It is well known that farming is the basic of a country，without which people would starve．（高分句型一）I hope the whole world would be rid of hunger．Besides，we can make use of what we have learned in school to improve our agriculture．（高分句型二）Thus our countryside will become more and more prosperous．
       I will work hard to reach my future．I will exercise regularly to build up my body and work hard in my study to be well educated．Only with a strong body and rich knowledge can I become a good farmer．（高分句型三）
      Thank you!

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．