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20．什么樣的爸爸才是好爸爸？最近流行的電視真人秀節(jié)目"爸爸去哪兒哪？（Where Are We Going，Dad？）"引起了大家對(duì)這個(gè)問(wèn)題的廣泛關(guān)注．
請(qǐng)聯(lián)系生活實(shí)際談?wù)勀阈哪恐械暮冒职�，�?nèi)容包括：
闡明父愛(ài)對(duì)孩子成長(zhǎng)的重要性；
好爸爸應(yīng)該具備的特征；（特征至少兩點(diǎn)）
你對(duì)自己爸爸的感受．
要求：語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，語(yǔ)篇連貫，字?jǐn)?shù)120詞左右．
What kind of father is a good father？Recently，a popular TV Reality show"Where Are We Going，Dad？"has brought it to the public's attention again．

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分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息講述什么樣的爸爸才是好爸爸．寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：闡明父愛(ài)對(duì)孩子成長(zhǎng)的重要性；好爸爸應(yīng)該具備的特征；（特征至少兩點(diǎn)）你對(duì)自己爸爸的感受．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：public's attention公眾的注意；play an important role 起重要的作用；set a good example for 為…樹(shù)立好的榜樣；is occupied with 忙于；protect…from…保護(hù)…免受

解答 What kind of father is a good father？Recently，a popular TV Reality show"Where Are We Going，Dad？"has brought it to the public's attention again．There is no doubt that fathers play an important role during their kids'growing up．（高分句型）In reality，some fathers'absence in their kids'life has caused some family problems．In this TV show，five fathers set a good example for their kids by helping them deal with pressure，understanding their desires，setting achievable goals．（高分句型）Besides，they give their children affection and warmth whenever necessary．
   My father is such a person．He seems strict but in the soul he is kind．During the weekdays，he is occupied with his work，but at weekends，we usually spend time together watching movies or doing some sports．And he shows me every father should be like a mountain to protect their kids from harm and teach them in a wise way．（高分句型）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 應(yīng)該注意適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當(dāng)選用表示因果、遞進(jìn)、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復(fù)使用句式相同的簡(jiǎn)單句而造成的單調(diào)感．（1）認(rèn)真審題，確定體裁． （2）構(gòu)思要點(diǎn)．根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達(dá)的要點(diǎn)．設(shè)計(jì)好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時(shí)態(tài)、人稱等，把要點(diǎn)串聯(lián)起來(lái)，構(gòu)成文章框架．（3）選詞造句，避難選易．（4）認(rèn)真檢查，避免錯(cuò)誤．仔細(xì)閱讀全文，查找是否有錯(cuò)，注意時(shí)態(tài)、單詞拼寫、字母大小寫、標(biāo)點(diǎn)是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致．